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1楼 Snowww
等级:小学生
发帖数:6
回帖数:57
|  发帖时间 - 2007/11/21 13:25:34
| 刚开始做外贸,邮件写得很烂,被老板批过的,以下是今天的一封邮件,请各位帮忙指教修改,谢谢!
Dear Mr ~,
How are you!?Hope everything goes well with you!
We believe that the goods delivered on Oct.25 should be reached you in due time already.
Any problem pls kindly contact us. And pls kindly advise when shall we arrange the
deliver for the balance of the goods?
In addition,we pleased to inform you that many new items were developed recently,
for more details welcome to visit our web:www(dot)fk-sh(dot)com(dot)cn
we hope the samples displayed there will help you in making *域名隐藏* new inquiry,
welcome here and we will try our best to offer you our competitive prices. Best Regards!
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2楼 adamal
等级:高中生
发帖数:16
回帖数:227
| 发帖时间 - 2007/11/21 21:39:33
| Dear Mr Adam
Thanks for your always supports and hope everything goes well with you.
Pls note that we delivered your goods on 25th,Oct.,i estimate that it will reach destination port on about 10th,Nov.,I wonder if you have received it or not,pls tell me ASAP.
Dear sir,I hope that you will be satisfied with our products,if anything needs to be solved,pls do not hesitate to let me know,i will do my best to meet your requirements.
In addition,I have some good news for you that is some new products have been devoloped successfully,I am very glad to recommend them to *域名隐藏* more detailed information about them,pls visit our homepage at www(dot)fk-sh(dot)com(dot)cn
looking forward to your prompt response and your next order,thank you. best regards 如有外贸邮件及信件需要帮忙，不妨告诉我：adamal@21cn(dot)com MSN:jsjilin@hotmail(dot)com QQ：383661755 大家多多交流，共同提高。
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3楼 snowww
等级:小学生
发帖数:6
回帖数:57
| 发帖时间 - 2007/11/22 13:11:47
| 谢谢楼上大侠!
以下是今天的一封,请大家多多帮忙,让小女子进步得快些,谢谢了!
Dear ~
Hope everything goes well with you and your esteemed company!
Thank you very much for your order.
It is grateful to get the opportunity to establish the bussiness relation with you,
But we regret to say that the payment term you suggested is not acceptable for us.
It would be much appreciated if you could arrange the payment by 100% Irrevocable L/C
at Sight instead of L/C at 90 days B/L date,since this is the normal practice for all
customers for the initial *域名隐藏* kindly understand.
In addition,After study the P/O you offered,we find the prices for item#...
are different from our offer,compare with the differentias,we believe it should not consider
as a *域名隐藏* pls kindly re-check and revise the prices by *域名隐藏* you!
Looking forward to your prompt reply! Best Regards
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4楼 snowww
等级:小学生
发帖数:6
回帖数:57
| 发帖时间 - 2007/11/22 13:15:54
| 路过的大侠都请指教多多指教哦!非常感谢!!!
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5楼 victoryhlan
等级:小学生
发帖数:4
回帖数:32
| 发帖时间 - 2007/11/22 13:39:46
| 已经很不错了，我写的还没那么好呢
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6楼 snowww
等级:小学生
发帖数:6
回帖数:57
| 发帖时间 - 2007/11/22 14:59:47
| 谢谢楼上,让我有信心多了~
但是我知道自己还有很多很多要学的,而且发现在这个论坛能学到好多东西.
也请大家多多指教.
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7楼 snowww
等级:小学生
发帖数:6
回帖数:57
| 发帖时间 - 2007/11/23 9:07:26
| 今天这封邮件让我头痛了，跟客户谈条款，跟客户要求即期可是人家只接受60天,现在公司也还定下来是否接受,我想可能会接受30天吧,所以写了下面这封邮件,请各位多多指教,或哪位大侠有跟客户谈条款的好方法,小女子在这里讨教了,谢谢!
Dear ~, Thank you for your replay!
We are sorry to hear that the payment term we suggested is not acceptable for you. With the view of encouraging business , let’s meet each other halfway to fix the payment term of L/C at 30 days B/L date. We hope this will meet your approval.
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8楼 snowww
等级:小学生
发帖数:6
回帖数:57
| 发帖时间 - 2007/11/23 10:22:06
| 有人吗?我也是在线等哦~~
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9楼 adamal
等级:高中生
发帖数:16
回帖数:227
| 发帖时间 - 2007/11/23 10:30:35
| 你已经写得很不错了,只是可能有写语句的表达可以更加委婉,要符合欧美人的表达习惯.
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10楼 snowww
等级:小学生
发帖数:6
回帖数:57
| 发帖时间 - 2007/11/23 11:47:54
| 恩,谢谢adamal ,我努力会改进的
你能不能帮举例改几个句子啊?我太缺乏积累了,很多时候也想表达得委婉些的,可是就不知道该怎么说.
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