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1楼 wendychen
等级:大专生
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|  发帖时间 - 2005/3/2 12:46:01
| 下面是朋友的工厂简介，请大家指正下，帮忙看看有什么不足的地方需要改正，谢谢！
Located in Fengxi Cailong industry zone of Chaozhou Guangdong, our factory is a specialized enterprise focus on all kinds of ceramic products.
Fully taking advantage of Ceramic Capital, our factory integrates
manufacture with trading to build up ourself production and sale
network while engendering producing management system for uniform
design and sale.
As participating in international competition actively, we devote
ourself to combination of humanism characteristics and artistic
style, and organize professional design team to research for
continuous innovation and excellent-quality products. Now our main
porcelains range from Canton glaze, bule and white porcelain,
Japanese glaze, relief glaze, Chaozhou glaze, and resin, which found
a good sale in Europe, America, and Southeast Asia.
We win favors from our clients widely by tasteful and high-quality
products. Our slogan is also our corporate goal, 'Quality foremost,
reputation foremost, requirement satisfied.' Welcome clients from all
circles to esthablish business relationship with us and seek for
prosperous future together.
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2楼 Wendychen
等级:大专生
发帖数:9
回帖数:396
| 发帖时间 - 2005/3/3 12:48:55
| 有谁帮忙看下？谢谢~~~
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3楼 Phillis
等级:博士后
发帖数:94
回帖数:3332
| 发帖时间 - 2005/3/3 17:48:44
| | YOU WILL NEED TO DO A LOT OF MODIFICATION TO THIS BEFORE IT BECOMES A GOOD PROMO Located in Fengxi Cailong industry zone of Chaozhou Guangdong, our factory is a specialized enterprise focusing on all kinds of ceramic *域名隐藏* taking advantage of Ceramic Capital (WHAT DO YOU INTEND BY THIS), our factory integrates manufacturING with trading to build up A production and sale network while engendering producT management system for uniform design and QUALITY. As ACTIVE participANTS in GLOBAL MARKET, we ARE devoteD to A BALANCED MIXTURE OF QULATITY AND artistic style, and EMPLOYS organizeD professional design team to research for continuous innovation and excellent-quality products. our main Porcelains range from Canton glaze, blue and white porcelain, Japanese glaze, relief glaze, Chaozhou glaze, and resin, which HAVE FOUND A GOOD MARKET in Europe, America, and Southeast Asia. We HAVE WON ACCOLADES from our clients THROUGH OUR ARTISTIC and high-quality products. Our slogan is also our corporate goal, 'Quality foremost, reputation foremost, requirement satisfied.' We Welcome ALL WHO ARE HOLD ARTISTIC value AND QUALITY IN HIGH REGARD FROM all circles to establish business relationship with us TO seek A prosperous future together
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4楼 飘叶
等级:博士后
发帖数:53
回帖数:2442
| 发帖时间 - 2005/3/11 10:11:32
| | Welcome to the new home page for (The name of ur company) . Located in Fengxi Cailong industry zone, Chaozhou City, Guangdong Prov. Our factory has been founded with the goal of researching, designing, and manufacturing high quality ceramic products using original products and technologies. Fully taking advantage of Ceramic Capital (what do you intend by this), our factory integrates manufacturing with trading to build up a production and sale network while engendering product management system for uniform design and quality. As active participants in global market, we are devoted to a balanced mixture of quality and artistic style, and employs organized professional design team to research for continuous innovation and excellent-quality products. our main Porcelains range from Canton glaze, blue and white porcelain, Japanese glaze, relief glaze, Chaozhou glaze, and resin with our successful growth, which we have taken steps to advance our position in the Europe, America, and Southeast Asia market. We have won accolades from our clients through our artistic and high-quality products. Our slogan is also our corporate goal, 'Quality foremost, Reputation foremost, Requirement satisfied.' We welcome all who are hold artistic value and quality in high regard from all circles to establish business relationship with us to seek a prosperous future together. You are welcome to contact us.
We would be glad to answer your questions or consider your problems together.
E-mail:
Tel:
Fax: Web-site; Adress:
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5楼 Phillis
等级:博士后
发帖数:94
回帖数:3332
| 发帖时间 - 2005/3/11 10:39:14
| Please refer to my advice and modification as following:
your corporate slogan doesn't sound too good, Quality foremost, Reputation foremost, Requirement satisfied.' looks like a direct translation of a Chinese phrase，well construction for one;
2nd ly you are not doing a good job of getting your message across ;
then if ur customers who i assume will predominantly be from the west read this they are not going to be too impressed.
Fully taking advantage of Ceramic Capital - doesn't make sense.
products using original products and technologies. - instead of products u should talk about the quality of raw materials………… I think the following attachment will be better:
Welcome to the new home page. We are located in Fengxi Cailong Industry Zone, Chaozhou City, Guangdong Prov. Our factory was found with the goal designing, and manufacturing high quality ceramic products using the best raw materials and technologies available. Fully taking advantage of Ceramic Capital(what do you intend by this), Our factory integrates manufacturing with trading to build up a production and sale network while engendering product management system and research for uniform design and quality. As active participant in global market, we are devoted providing the best quality as well as artistic style, and toward this end employs professional design teams to research for continuous innovations and to produce excellent quality products. Our main porcelains range include canton glaze, blue and white porcelain, Japanese glaze, relief glaze, Chaozhou glaze, and resin. We have seen major growth in the Europe, America, and Southeast Asia market and are taking all necessary steps to consolidate and advance our positions in these markets. We have won accolades from our clients for our artistic and high-quality products. Our slogan“ Quality foremost, Reputation foremost, Customer satisfaction foremost ”. We welcome all who are hold artistic value and quality in high regard to establish business relationship with us to join us in this endeavor and to seek a prosperous future together.
[QUOTE]以下是引用飘叶在2005-3-11 10:11:32的发言：
Welcome to the new home page for (The name of ur company) . Located in Fengxi Cailong industry zone, Chaozhou City, Guangdong Prov. Our factory has been founded with the goal of researching, designing
本帖子2005-03-12 16:01:15由Phillis进行编辑!! 本帖子2005-03-14 19:11:48由Phillis进行编辑!!
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