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1楼 BMW_M750
等级:大专生
发帖数:47
回帖数:377
|  发帖时间 - 2004/11/5 16:36:16
| Dear *域名隐藏* :
This is SKKY company in China. We have much interest in the cooperation with your *域名隐藏* company has sent a E-mail to your company about the samples and *域名隐藏* really want to become th main gas sensor suppler in Russia by cooperation with your company .We can supply the excellent quality and competive price in the *域名隐藏* wish the friendship will be founded betwween us sincerelly.
We can send you the samples now you want to *域名隐藏* can choose the air transportion or other transportions which you *域名隐藏* only wish you company could pay the cost of *域名隐藏* do you think about it,Elint?
We wish your prompt answer of you company and best regards!
Yours sincerelly Piaojilong Tel:86-574-87905657 87905216
Fax:86-574-87905852
Web:www(dot)skky(dot)com(dot)cn
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2楼 BMW_M750
等级:大专生
发帖数:47
回帖数:377
| 发帖时间 - 2004/11/5 16:39:49
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3楼 cocoliu
等级:中专生
发帖数:20
回帖数:348
| 发帖时间 - 2004/11/5 18:28:16
| 简单看了一下,
有语法错误哦.....
不过希望老外看得懂..
呵呵
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4楼 brooke
等级:高中生
发帖数:42
回帖数:188
| 发帖时间 - 2004/11/5 20:52:10
| 同意楼上的说法。
你们公司没有更专业的人了吗？
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5楼 BMW_M750
等级:大专生
发帖数:47
回帖数:377
| 发帖时间 - 2004/11/8 8:56:14
| 谢谢 CoCo!
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6楼 zxjzxj8
等级:小学生
发帖数:0
回帖数:29
| 发帖时间 - 2004/11/8 18:56:54
| 老外也能看懂，但是问题比较多，如果想吃这晚饭，***好好学学外贸英语。
开头的称谓有问题，要么是DEAR ELINE，要么是DEAR MR./MS./MISS/MRS.../要么是DEAR SIR, 没有DEAR SIR ELINE，这么一说的。另外DEAR ...后用逗号，不是冒号。另外写的比较罗嗦，不必用过于繁琐的客套话，有些语法问题比较多。
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7楼 zxjzxj8
等级:小学生
发帖数:0
回帖数:29
| 发帖时间 - 2004/11/8 19:09:07
| | 以下是我按照你的意思大概简化的一封信，当然可能也有问题，希望对你有一些帮助。 Dear Elint, This is SKKY company in China, we have sent Email to you regarding the catalogue and samples. Our products shows excellent quality and competitive price, after got our sample and pricelist you will find this. We can send you catalogue and samples by airfreight or by courier services, but you have to pay the cost of sample and freight charges. Should you have any questions, please feel free to contact us. Looking forward to your early confirmation and long term business relationship with your esteemed company. Best regards, Piao jilong (性和名分开）
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8楼 BMW_M750
等级:大专生
发帖数:47
回帖数:377
| 发帖时间 - 2004/11/10 8:51:39
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